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Cheetah (Speed Paint Link Added) by CarolineRaquel Cheetah (Speed Paint Link Added) by CarolineRaquel
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This was meant to be a rendering study, which, overall,I guess it looks nice. Just a random cheetah for you.
Critique much appreciated on this one. Specially on composition.


I need to challenge myself more and I can see I need help to improve.
I can see this looks bland and with no purpose...no story. Because there isn't really. This started just a design doodle that I decided to paint to release stress.

Here are a few things I'd love if people could talk about, if possible, on how I can get:

- Depth of enviroment and still manage to focus on the animal.
- Make the composition more interesting.
- Better render definition. Maybe tips for making a better looking fur?
- Better lighting. Which is probably something I need to work a looot.

I won't fix it now, but I'll take the suggestions for future works!
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I really like the style you have given this guy, the expression is priceless. He looks quite un-interested, yet his apathy is still hinted with a bit of alertness.

Vision: The composition. It needs contrast, I feel that while it is a very stylized character, the colors need something to balance it. Maybe a darker shading in the background to bring it together. Possibly some more variance in the grass, even a tree to add more interest. That is just my personal preference, however. I also like shading with unique colors, maybe a cool purple/blue tint to the fur/grass will bring out more life.

Originality: Your style is quite unique, and the whiskers, to the ears and expression, and the pose itself is just lovely.

Technique: Cant critique much here, other than the fur seems to be a bit "pasted" onto the solid body. If you can understand what I mean, it just does not look like it flows together with the rest of the painting. In the future more of a polished look could be achieved with time spent on fur placement.

Impact: You're right, lighting could be a little more dramatic. I personally love vivid lighting and contrast, more shadows and highlights could be used in the grass as well as the cheetah.

Overall, really nice work. I always wished I could have such a unique cartoon like style as this! (:
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I think this design is fantastic! You are obviously skilled at the shading/coloring process and setting up a unique character design. It's clear as soon as you look at the piece- the semi-realistic rendering meshes perfectly with the playful stylization of the animal while still maintaining a tangible creature. I'm pretty impressed with the piece, honestly.

If you are looking for critique, I'd be glad to try and help. I think your color choices for the background are spot on- you've done a great job setting that up, though I think the character could be placed in a more expansive background if you are looking for a more realistic depth. I think expanding the visible ground from a sort of single point perspective view would help tremendously with the depth I think you are trying to achieve. Rather than placing a definite layering of the grass for the foreground only, extend the visual back past the figure and into the background. I would suggest raising the horizon up a bit to accomplish that kind of viewpoint. Not a ton, though! I love the amount of sky in the bg, it emphasizes the really lovely, long neck of the cheetah. Maybe fiddle around with the crop a bit- try taller, wider, etc and see how it changes the composition.
I like the interesting way you've set up the horizon in the background though. It's really inventive and suits the playful style of the image well.

I think that the way you've colored this piece is fantastic, honestly, though you say you want to improve upon it. I think that defining your light source a little better can help with that. There are very few areas that I notice the light source changing a bit, but that's not such a big deal. I would avoid blowing out that white on the fur on the neck, though. It's a bit distracting, and light would not hit so sharply in that area only. If you are going to have a harsh bright light, carry it along the whole piece. The light appears softer on the face (where the facial structure is defined and there are definite shaded areas but it is not a harsh shadow), and so I would probably keep that mellow coloration throughout the figure. There are some really saturated bits along the base of the neck and shoulder which kind of suggests the cheetah is sitting in a setting with really bright reds & oranges, like a sunset, but the rest of the figure and the sky does not depict that. It's a bit like the bottom half of the picture is trapped in a sunset and the top half is in midday, out of the direct sun. Just a tiny inconsistency, but still only noticeable if I'm really looking for it.

The colors themselves are absolutely gorgeous though, I really do love the piece. I think it's really lively, interesting, and a bit sassy, even if it's just a doodle it has a lot of personality. Well done, really, especially for a practice piece, haha. Sorry to be wordy, I don't mean to be picky! I guess I just wanted to look at the things you mentioned in your artists comment, and I'm not so good with being concise, haha.
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essencestudios Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2012   Traditional Artist
featured! [link] :iconcheetahlaplz:
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Shadow-D-Keeper Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Featured here [link] :D
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catz537 Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
reminds me of coraline style...very nice :)
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namenotrequired Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2012  Student Interface Designer
I've featured this in The International Cheetah Day Challenge :) This day is tomorrow, please help us raise awareness for this cause if you can! :hug:
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Harmony-Bender Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2012  Student General Artist
I love what you did with the grass.
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PrincessYadira Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
WOW!! i love it! <3
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PiperPie Featured By Owner May 4, 2012
I LOVE the whiskers! Great job! C:
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CarolineRaquel Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
Thank you!!! :D
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PiperPie Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2012
Your welcome!
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Imaginatik Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2012  Student Digital Artist
This is really cool! I love how curvy it is!
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nishagandhi Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
very cool work!
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Toucat Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2012  Hobbyist
Very cool! That cheetah looks faaaaantastic with that fur and the background colors!
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LunaMach Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
hiarhiar that's a great piece <: looks funny
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CarolineRaquel Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
Thank you!
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LunaMach Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
no po ;>
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DoomScarf Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Like I said in the video, deliciously stylized. Now that she mentions it, I agree with what :icontasteslikeanya: said about the whiskers looking a little sharp compared to the rest of the animal. And perhaps you could soften the edges on this guy a bit like :iconvekke: said.

Still a gorgeous piece none-the-less!
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CarolineRaquel Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
Yup, I'll try their tips! It's very useful!
Thank you!
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DoomScarf Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome. :)
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PuddlesOfCuddles Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2012  Student Filmographer
Too many comments and too long to see if someone did an efficient critique - SO I'LL JUST MENTION IT ANYWAYS!

Do your BEST to give some sense of dominance in your background. Think of your canvas in an abstract form really quick. Reduce everything to shapes and 3 to 4 values. The sky dominates the composition being light and point downward to your character. Far background echoing a V shape, foreground also echoing this V shape.

Over all, your composition is very symmetrical, which is boring and plain. Add some variety to your shapes, give one particular side dominance. a V composition is a good one, but you'll never see a very successful one smack dab in the middle of the image.

Other than that, everything works out. Far background is implied enough, and silhouetted to totally work. The grass is a BIT busy, perhaps lower the contrast, and simplify some of your creaks and cracks. They WORK as a rendering, but are a tad distracting.

Lighting doesn't seem consistent on the characters face compared to his neck/ears. Just be fully aware of your light source during the painting. I can tell you know what you're doing, just perhaps you rushed it in this area a bit.

Absolutely loving the caricature though by the way, very fun!
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TastesLikeAnya Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2012   Artist
Oh shiiit. I didn't look at the desc. at all for the crit. None of the issues you brought up stuck out at me, though. Not at all. Struggling to see anything, now.

Also, why is this not in my favs.
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CarolineRaquel Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
Ah, it's alright!
Oh and if had to add something about this: Your work really inspired me for this work! :3
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TastesLikeAnya Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2012   Artist
Maybe that's why I like it so.
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JuDeLucca Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2012
muito bommmm!!!! sua foda!!!
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CarolineRaquel Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
Ei, olha quem tá falando, sua foda da animação!
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Vekke Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
I can't get over your stylization! It's so appealing and creative, ahhhh

The edges on the cheetah though are really really sharp. I'd recommend making them just a little softer/subtler, so he fits in the background better.
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CarolineRaquel Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
Yesss, I guess I understand what you're talking about.
I guess I was just trying to do something like this:

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Caticus Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2012
haha! :D I love it! I love his whiskers. :3
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CarolineRaquel Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
Thanks!!
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AmandaMyers Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2012
Since you have some already excellent and better than I can say critiques, I won't say too much about this. I can't really give you any help regarding depth, rendering or lighting since I myself severely lack in those areas. As for more interesting compositions, in general, you tend to do a lot of animals just sitting around. Don't get me wrong. I love your style. I really envy you for it. You've got this way with breaking down your animals into these lovely geometric forms that just make everything you draw really appealing to me, but you say you want to push yourself and I think that maybe one of the ways you can do that is to think past the sketch phase and figure out something for these wonderfully stylized animals to be doing. What if this cheetah was chasing down his prey or interacting with its family or some other creature? If something is just sitting around, what if you showed it from a different perspective. What if we looked up at the cheetah or down on the cheetah or saw it from an angle that maybe not many people have really thought about? Get out of that comfort zone of "here's a pretty animal."

I feel I'm starting to ramble, so let me just end with saying that nit picking rendering and lighting and depth to death can still not leave you with a satisfying or interesting image if your subjects always end up the same way.
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CarolineRaquel Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
Yes, Amanda! Your comment seems to have read what's on my mind lately. You're so right about everything you said.

I like to paint well behaved pictures, which I'm comfortable with. Normally here is how it works for me: I'm bored > I open my sketchbook > pick a random design > thinks "I could paint this since I'm bored".

It'd never something planned, you know what I mean? Normally, my stories, are all in my head or thumbnail drawings, as I'm scared to paint them and realize they suck balls. Yes, it's a confort zone, I know. And I'm really irritated about it.

I've told myself that the next painting I do, will have an interaction between two character, will have a story, and will be well planned. I can never improve if I don't risk myself into making mistakes.

Thanks a lot for commenting, really!
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Furrama Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012   Digital Artist
I like how you have the ground and the grass forcing your focal point up at the cat's face. I think the angling could be stronger if you pointed the cat's ears towards the corners of the page. The eye doesn't have a good place to get out of the picture, or get in from the top. You could also fix this I guess by making the grass longer.
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CarolineRaquel Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
Thanks for the obervations!!
I'll consider those for future works!
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CoffeeChick17 Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
this is super cute. I absolutely love the art style and the expression on the cheetahs face is awesome. Great Job!
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CarolineRaquel Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
Thanks a lot! Glad you like!
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CoffeeChick17 Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
no problem :)
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katedotcom Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
não vou escrever uma crítica por que não tenho muito para dizer
eu amei, adoro cheetas, gostei bastante do estilo de pintura e do jeito caricatura
adoraria ter isso como um quadro ou pôster hahaha

lindo mesmo, parabéns!
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CarolineRaquel Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
Muito obrigada, Kate! Que bom que gostou!
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acidicslushie Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012   General Artist
ughhhh art is hard as balls man. once you think you're a decent artist, you get lazy and then you need to be kicked in the ass again and getting back to that decent point is really frustrating.
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CarolineRaquel Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
I totally know what you mean.
Sometimes I get really frustrated. Specially because I can't manage time to study the way I wanted.
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acidicslushie Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2012   General Artist
There's something up with my metabolism or something because I can only do work in short bursts when I have a really high amount of energy. I also get distracted and demotivated easily so that's no good.
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CarolineRaquel Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
If you want, add me on msn and we can talk more: lorac_arievilo@hotmail.com
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acidicslushie Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2012   General Artist
Alright my email is Blueyboo@hotmail.com just in case msn decides to act all funky and not send an invitation.
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CarolineRaquel Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
Added you.
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acidicslushie Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2012   General Artist
Hrrmmm I'm still not getting anything. :/ I'm not sure what the dealio is here.
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CarolineRaquel Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
Still nothing?
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